Seishin Ramble
Jul. 20th, 2011 11:48 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
mastergraywolfSOOO, here's another Ramble (along with reflecting) from MGW about how the hiatus of Seishin (Pure Heart) Series is bugging me, and how I think my writing style is terrible.
So I was reading a book set in a countryside.
The author wrote like he has lived on a farm before and maybe has done horseback riding. He understands the crops and the nature of the animals that live there; also, how the farmer's plow endangers the life of those that live in the farm. But this plow also preserves the farm too.
Following me so far? If not, a reminder that it's a ramble, it can go different courses.
I don't think, with my current writing ability, that I can create the [intriguing?] force that I hoped to show for Seishin. Or maybe I have trouble with truly 100% appreciating my own work.
But did I say before that I think I can't review and analyze? Or I'm not that perceptive?
Seishin began as a story that I planned for one-hundred chapters. That was my goal, a normal narrative. I made four chapters after putting it on hiatus. The events were the following:
- Prologue: Shoutarou wakes up injured and hears the voice of his mother and Koga Ninja, (See "battle of Tsugemachi").
- The story starts about 3 years before the prologue. Kyoushirou is hired by a Sasaki (Sasaki Takatori? I made him fictional but I think an actual person or two existed with that name during Warring States)
- Azai forces attack Takatori's castle. Kyou confronts Iga forces fleeing the scene.
- After father's funeral, Shou speaks with his mother about house leadership. Hayato and Yoshi arrives for fishing.
- I didn't write the chapter but Shou, Hayato and Yoshi were going to save Shiori from a ronin attack.
My thoughts were "I can't capture [the image of] Japan properly". The Iga-Koga rivalry becomes evident, but the writing delivery felt weak.
That's all for my ramble for now.
~ MGW
So I was reading a book set in a countryside.
The author wrote like he has lived on a farm before and maybe has done horseback riding. He understands the crops and the nature of the animals that live there; also, how the farmer's plow endangers the life of those that live in the farm. But this plow also preserves the farm too.
Following me so far? If not, a reminder that it's a ramble, it can go different courses.
I don't think, with my current writing ability, that I can create the [intriguing?] force that I hoped to show for Seishin. Or maybe I have trouble with truly 100% appreciating my own work.
But did I say before that I think I can't review and analyze? Or I'm not that perceptive?
Seishin began as a story that I planned for one-hundred chapters. That was my goal, a normal narrative. I made four chapters after putting it on hiatus. The events were the following:
- Prologue: Shoutarou wakes up injured and hears the voice of his mother and Koga Ninja, (See "battle of Tsugemachi").
- The story starts about 3 years before the prologue. Kyoushirou is hired by a Sasaki (Sasaki Takatori? I made him fictional but I think an actual person or two existed with that name during Warring States)
- Azai forces attack Takatori's castle. Kyou confronts Iga forces fleeing the scene.
- After father's funeral, Shou speaks with his mother about house leadership. Hayato and Yoshi arrives for fishing.
- I didn't write the chapter but Shou, Hayato and Yoshi were going to save Shiori from a ronin attack.
My thoughts were "I can't capture [the image of] Japan properly". The Iga-Koga rivalry becomes evident, but the writing delivery felt weak.
That's all for my ramble for now.
~ MGW
