Mission FAIL
Aug. 21st, 2010 10:55 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
mastergraywolfPreparations for trip are taking longer than I thought.
As for the next SolAka chapter, it looks like I couldn't make it. I MADE IT JUST AROUND THE END, but I couldn't proofread. I'm also not that confident in writing combat scenes so I would definitely have to look over it plenty of times to see if I'm satisfied with all of the material. Many times I had to replace/edit countless sentences; the last thing I need to do is type it in a way so confusing that it won't be much of an entertaining read.
"What's happening?" "Why is it so repetitive?" There's also the transition or switching between the names of Yami (female General) and Yamikyo (the mech) throughout the chapter.
Also, if I had stayed up any longer I would've regretted it.
If anyone is curious, the chapter is over three thousand (3000!) words long. That is way past my preference. I don't want to shorten it though because it looks really good.
So until next week I'll leave you with a chapter title and am outline:
Chapter 7 is titled An Ally of Justice. Shirei’s volcanic princess, Hiori Soratoga!.
Highlight:- Basically it's the Full Fight between Yuuko Hidaka in her SolAka and General Yami in her Yamikyo MK2. We learn that Yuuko's real name is Hiori Soratoga, and she is apparently a Princess from Planet Shirei. We also learned that Yami has some past with her.
- Yami is shown to be very arrogant and mean, while Hiori is shown to be very unyielding even struggling against Yamikyo. Blows are exchanged; despite Sol's great speed, Hiori has trouble against the armor.
- With the help of JSDF, SolAka manages to destroy the YKMK2's shoulder cannons. Still, no matter how many times the heavy Yamikyo fell, the armor couldn't be penetrated.
- Because of its small size, the Yamikyo's head is a weakness (connected to the camera). Yami is most concerned of high explosives and Solaka attacking the head.
- Yami threatens to kill the JSDF force, which makes Hiori stall. The fingers of Yamikyo's hands are blade-like, I guess like Freddy Kreuger, and can extend a good distance. It also has micromissiles.
- A JSDF Lieutenant motivates Hiori to fight
- She does; ultimately, Yamikyo is defeated by the Gale Talon.
- We also learn that SolAka seemed to have defeated Yami's signature mech the Kamegare. [/ done ]
Ok
Sorry, and see you.
When I get back and upload this, I'm going to edit my wiki and I'm going to return to HoGW
As for the next SolAka chapter, it looks like I couldn't make it. I MADE IT JUST AROUND THE END, but I couldn't proofread. I'm also not that confident in writing combat scenes so I would definitely have to look over it plenty of times to see if I'm satisfied with all of the material. Many times I had to replace/edit countless sentences; the last thing I need to do is type it in a way so confusing that it won't be much of an entertaining read.
"What's happening?" "Why is it so repetitive?" There's also the transition or switching between the names of Yami (female General) and Yamikyo (the mech) throughout the chapter.
Also, if I had stayed up any longer I would've regretted it.
If anyone is curious, the chapter is over three thousand (3000!) words long. That is way past my preference. I don't want to shorten it though because it looks really good.
So until next week I'll leave you with a chapter title and am outline:
Chapter 7 is titled An Ally of Justice. Shirei’s volcanic princess, Hiori Soratoga!.
Highlight:- Basically it's the Full Fight between Yuuko Hidaka in her SolAka and General Yami in her Yamikyo MK2. We learn that Yuuko's real name is Hiori Soratoga, and she is apparently a Princess from Planet Shirei. We also learned that Yami has some past with her.
- Yami is shown to be very arrogant and mean, while Hiori is shown to be very unyielding even struggling against Yamikyo. Blows are exchanged; despite Sol's great speed, Hiori has trouble against the armor.
- With the help of JSDF, SolAka manages to destroy the YKMK2's shoulder cannons. Still, no matter how many times the heavy Yamikyo fell, the armor couldn't be penetrated.
- Because of its small size, the Yamikyo's head is a weakness (connected to the camera). Yami is most concerned of high explosives and Solaka attacking the head.
- Yami threatens to kill the JSDF force, which makes Hiori stall. The fingers of Yamikyo's hands are blade-like, I guess like Freddy Kreuger, and can extend a good distance. It also has micromissiles.
- A JSDF Lieutenant motivates Hiori to fight
- She does; ultimately, Yamikyo is defeated by the Gale Talon.
- We also learn that SolAka seemed to have defeated Yami's signature mech the Kamegare. [/ done ]
Ok
Sorry, and see you.
When I get back and upload this, I'm going to edit my wiki and I'm going to return to HoGW
